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to the girl before speech:

you are not a prodigy,
despite talent for taking care of yourself.
understanding politics by grade school isn't worth much
being loved is.

having your hand gripped when stumbling.
playful laugh coaxed from your lungs.

bounce as much as you can.  
cherish your days of knowing how to land.


to the girl with my fingers:

they aren't as beautiful as they are lost.

shaking; nerves over taken by demons
screaming in the night.
struggling to tear needle away from skin

too crooked to be melodic
not articulate enough to move masses
hoping to find north; seeking direction.



to the girl after healing:

body a battlefield with no monuments,
topographical map of travail.
you have scars;
i am sorry for those.

you've stored love in people
just begging to give it back.
open your mouth; souls speak
yours needs to learn to light up mountains again


to you over there:

i miss you
the way I miss a forgotten memory.
existence is more than physical space.

here i assemble words by feeling not syntax
perhaps you own a 'chicago manual of style'
if so; would you mind being my editor?

there are parts of you nestled in my spine
playing peek-a-boo behind my vertebrae
mono but without the gift of a kiss
will be edited; as life is.

dA needs something for warning of possible triggers. just a thought.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2012-10-16
to myself: past/present/future/fourth dimension by ~smilewithlove is an amazing exploration of self through different points in time from the writer, concluding with a brilliant twist on the past/present/future concept. ( Featured by Nichrysalis )
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LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Professional Writer
This is an utter masterpiece. Congrats on a most-earned DD.
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much
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:iconladyofgaerdon:
LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Professional Writer
You're most welcome. :)
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Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012   Writer

There is not much to be said about this, though I make it a habit to comment with my favourites. So:

This is lovely. I can feel the life in it.
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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:iconlacewinged-beauty:
Lacewinged-Beauty Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012   Writer
You're welcome.
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:iconjakit:
Jakit Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student General Artist
Wow..... beautiful work :)
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks :)
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:iconoviedomedina:
oviedomedina Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012
Now this is honesty and wisdom put into words. Excellent.
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much. i'm glad to hear that it comes across that way.
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oviedomedina Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012
No problem!
Always nice to read some good poems!
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:iconroklar:
Roklar Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012
This is absolutely wonderful, a great reflection.
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:iconsmilewithlove:
smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much
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jakybouvier Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
wow. amazing :)))))
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:iconsmilewithlove:
smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :)
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:iconmalyre:
Malyre Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012
OwO This is beautiful.
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you
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HarmoniaMurasaki Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow... Two days after submission... Nice one. Congratulations on the DD, and make sure you keep writing!
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much and I intend to.
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HarmoniaMurasaki Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
:)
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JamminJo Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Well written.

Congratulations on your DD :)
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:iconsmilewithlove:
smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks very much :)
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JamminJo Featured By Owner Oct 18, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Welcome :)
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MisteroConBrio Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012
So lovely. I cannot compliment you as much as you deserve.
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you for your kind words
:hug:
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RoseSwan Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on your DD!!! :D
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks so much :)
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artspartz Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012
nice words. reads like my brain speaks.
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :hug:
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EightBitHero Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012
The most well-deserved daily deviation I have seen in a while. <3
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Congrats on the well deserved DD! :heart:
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
My pleasure :heart:
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:iconsmilingharrysyphilis:
Amazing work. The mention in the caption of 'possible triggers' is a bit scary--care to elaborate?
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much

just that a 'mature content warning' doesn't always fit things that might be triggering to people in recovery for eating disorders, self harm, drug addiction etc. and perhaps we need a way to denote those.
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Lover-and-the-Wild Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012
Very beautiful! :heart:
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you :heart:
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flummo Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student Writer
I haven't read something that makes me feel this way in a while, though I can't really pinpoint the feeling.

The concept and the execution are amazing. I imagined a girl very lost in the world but still trying to do her best. I especially loved

'too crooked to be melodic
not articulate enough to move masses
hoping to find north; seeking direction."


Congratulations on the DD. :clap:
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hearing that this could touch someone means a lot to me.

Thank you very very much. That is certainly how I feel so I'm glad that it came across in my words.
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flummo Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Student Writer
:heart:
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TaNa-Jo Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Student General Artist
Beautiful artwork :happybounce:
This Picture was invited to be featured in our Featured Folder Slideshow in our Group :la:

You are cheerful invited to join us and share your beautiful artworks

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#All-Art-Wanted
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you for the feature
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Adonael Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Some cool existential stuff - I like how you formatted it as a letter almost.
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
the idea that reality is relative is certainly an interesting concept to me.
thanks for the kind words
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Adonael Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
No worries.
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imaduckyrawr Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this is astounding
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 17, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thank you very much
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brassteeth Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2012
Oh Wonderful!. Has such an innocence in places, such calm naivety...Congratulations on your D.D
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smilewithlove Featured By Owner Oct 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
thanks so much
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